Authors Note: This is a alternation ending to the story we were read in reading lab. I picked it to end this way because I think that every person has good in them, and everyone can do the good think if they chose to. So I decided to make Cody do the right thing even though he may have needed the money, he wanted to earn it not take or steal for things.
I looked at the gold, then thought again of what Clarence had said to me, " You better leave me with my treasure!" I look at the gold once more, then picked it up and walked out the door. I walk until he found where he had burred Clarence, took a shovel and started to dig. I dug until he hit the wood casket. I un-screwed the screws and took of the top of the casket. Found the belt that help the treasure in place and strapped it back on his cold, colorless hand. I had never felt so bad in his life, almost stealing a mans most prized possession. I have been so dishonest, disloyal he would have been to Mr. Buchanan, who had done nothing wrong to me. I placed the top of the casket back on and closed it for the final time. I thought Clarence would like it if he took a minute to say something about him and his life, so I did. I pleaded to him how sorry I was, how I wouldn't ever be able to live with himself if I had. I said a final goodbye and turned around and walked off never returning to his grave.
It's four years later, my life is better than ever.My girlfriend and I are talking walk into the woods, we come upon some stone with words carved into it. As my girlfriend is reading what the stone says I remember that is this Mr. Buchanan grave. I told my girlfriend about the whole story and about how after I returned that gold treasure that my life has been better than ever. I then on that day I made a promise to myself that every year on the day of Clarence's death I would visit his grave stone.
On year later I was standing over by Clarence's grave stone and went over and place the gold ring I had as my own treasure. "This is for you , I almost took your treasure so therefor you can have mine." After that I walked away, the ring still lays there to today, untouched. I'm the only person who roams even close to Clarence grave. Every single year I walks to the grave and every single year my ring still sits on his grave, me not even bothering to touch it. I don't know why but that old man that he worked for means so much to him that he couldn't understand. The one day that I didn't go see him was the day of his own funereal.
WELL DONE ROSE, CAN YOU REVISE THE TENSE YOU USE TO TELL THE STORY, MAKING IT SIMILAR TO THE ORIGINAL STORY?
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